My personality is one of the points I want people to know. I can define myself as a patient person because I like to listen to other people when they are in trouble or when they need advice; I am there to help them all the time. Also, I can say that I am a friendly person. I enjoy giving my love to others, sharing my experiences and funny moments with them.
Another thing that I would like people to know about me is about what I like. One of the many things I love is music, because it is a good way of relaxing when I am stressed. I listen to music and try to forget everything. I also like basketball. It is my favorite sport because it allows the team work in order to get an objective which is to win. Those are the two things that I really love doing.
As the rest of people, there are some things I do not like. Heavy metal is a kind of music that I do not like. Some people say it is a good, but I personally think this kind of music is very noisy and that the people who sing it have mysterious lifes. Waking up early is another thing I dislike. Well, I think most of the people agree with me. I hate hear the alarm every morning to wake very early to get school on time. These are some of the things I do not like much.
As a conclusion, I am characterized by my personality, the things I like and dislike. Now, the people, who did not know many details related to me, know me better. They already know how I am like, what I like and what I do not, and they can say that I am a usual person as anybody else.
"Me"
How am I? Few people really know me very well; they know everything that characterizes me, and they can say many things related to me. But there are many people who do not know me well; they just know me because they see me everyday or because they talked to me twice or three times. So, I want those people to know some things about me as my personality, likes and dislikes.
My personality is one of the things I want people, who do not know me, know. I can define myself as a patient person because I like to listen to other persons when they are in trouble or when they need advice; I am there to help them all the time. Also, I can say that I am a friendly person. I enjoy to give my love to other persons, share my experiences and funny moments with them.
Another thing that I would like people to know about me is about what I like. One of the many things I love is music, because it is a good way of relaxing when I am stressed. I listen to music and try to forget everything. Basketball is another thing that I like. It is my favorite sport because it allows me to interact with many people; in addition, it allows to learn to work in team in order to get an objective which is to win. Those are two of the things that I really love.
The last thing is what I do not like. As all the people, there are many things that we do not like. Heavy metal is a kind of music that I do not like. Some people say it is a good, but I personally think this kind of music is very noisy and that the people who sing it have mysterious lives. Waking up early is another thing I do not like. Well, I think most of the people agree with me. I hate hear the alarm all the mornings to wake very early to get school on time. These are some of the things I do not really like.
As a conclusion, those are the things that characterize me. My personality, the things that I like and the things I do not like. Now, the people who did not know many things related to me, know me better. They already know how I am, what I like and what I do not, and they can say that I am a usual person as some others are.
I really liked your introductory essay because it made me to know a little bit more about you. I think that everything is clear, it is organized and has the supporting detailes that make it be very interesting and caught my attention all the time. You do not made grammar and punctuation mistakes. It was well distributed. Finally, I just want you to say congratulations.
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ResponderEliminarhi Ernesto!!!!
ResponderEliminarwEll I think that in general your essay is ok. XD i liked it. it has a good hook, also I think that it catch the readers attention.
the redaction is clear and organized.
i have a doubt, i think that in your introduction missed to write a verb, is it correct??? the paragraph says this: "people who do not me very well" but I think that you omited the ver know before of me.
in general I think that you described it very well because you wrote thinks that I did not know about you. good job Ernestito!!!! i like it!!!! congratulations for you first essay!!!